This is Chris Macaluso's (Crappy Mac's) portfolio. It was posted and designed by Anthony Hsu (Erwaman).
I think this composition is pretty good . I feel that I had a good beginning, middle, and end. I feel that that I said and put out what the story is going to be about in the first paragraph. An example is. I go to the University of Harvard and growing up I always wanted to go there. I tried my hardest to get here in all of my other grades before this. I also think that I had a good middle describing everything. Everybody in my family was so proud of me and now after I receive my diploma I am going to be a very successful lawyer. I also think that my conclusion was very good too. I think that I ended it at the right place in good detail.
I feel that the part that gave me the most trouble were the writing requirements. I got a D on most of my compositions this marking period because I did my requirements wrong and I didn’t know what was wrong with them until after the last one of the marking period was done. I got the appositive right every time. An example is: Mike, the very smart kid is very successful. The other one is the one I got wrong every time. The six lines of dialogue. I always mixed up the punctuation and quotation marks. One example is. “What do you plan to do”, said Mr. Donald. It’ supposed to be like. “What do you plan to do,” said Mr. Donald.
Since I know how to do it right now I feel that I should have asked after the first composition what was wrong and how do you fix it but I didn’t for the first one and I didn’t for the rest of them and because of that I got about a D on everyone. I also feel that I could of spend a little more time on them and maybe I would have seen what was wrong or maybe look for one that was real in a textbook or on the internet or in a normal book. That really hurt my average and all I had to do is ask a simple question or open a book.
I feel that I can compare this composition to Soda Explosion. I feel that those were the two best. Decides for the writing requirements which I did bad in all of them. I feel that I had a good beginning, middle, and ending . I feel that in the beginning I stated what the story was going to be about. In the middle I feel that I described everything pretty good and in the end I ended at the right time. Which a lot of the time I end to soon and it makes the story a lot worst and I feel I didn’t do that in this one and Soda Explosion.
One I thing that I kike about my writing is my beginning paragraph. I feel that I state and everyone knows what’s going to happen mostly in the first paragraph. I go to the University of Harvard and growing up I always wanted to go there. I tried my hardest to get here in all of my other grades before this. I feel that is better to describe what is going to happened early. I think that is better because they can get into it earlier and finish it. I feel that I described everything pretty good and that can be the difference in the story if it’s good or not.
I really don’t consider myself a writer because I don’t like to write and when I have to for language art’s I think most of the time it’s bad. I do feel though that I have improved since the beginning of the year in my beginning, middle, and end. I also think that I learned some new things in writing compositions. I learned new things when I have to use writing requirements and change it in the revision like an appositive. Mike, the very smart kid is very successful.