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My example of good writing is including a lot of detail in the writing and I feel that throughout the year I have grown and that I have included more detail in every single composition this year and I am not that good of a writer but I it is definitely better then in September and earlier in my writing days in school. One example from a book Taking Sides which I read in a book report earlier in the year is Coach Yesutis screaming at his team. An example is The fluorescent lights hummed overhead, and the heater blew warm, dusty air. I think that is a really good example and that helps the story and makes a better understanding of it. That’s good writing to me. An example from my writing is I saw the laces spinning perfectly and I noticed it was a curve ball and I stepped and I watched the ball perfectly, and I swung It was a bomb down the left field line and I was so scared and I could only prey it went over the fence and I jumped and I went crazy. I feel that that is a lot of detail and that is how I right my best. Another example is Now I realize that I was worrying, and so nervous that I felt so sick I just wanted to go home and meet them at my house. I would feel so much better and relaxed but I can’t and I won’t be nervous like that again.
One thing I can do now that I couldn’t do before but I can do now is more detail. I used to put a little detail or none at all. Now I put a lot of detail and I feel that my writing is a lot better now then it was in September because I feel that a lot of detail is very important as I stated before. An example from my writing recently is The first pitch was a strike, then another, strike, and I found myself down 0-2 and the next pitch was right down the middle. I saw the laces spinning perfectly and I noticed it was a curve ball and I stepped and I watched the ball perfectly, and I swung It was a bomb down the left field line and I was so scared and I could only prey it went over the fence and I jumped and I went crazy. We won the championship and I was so happy my grandparents could see that. Screaming was all I heard. I was so happy. I feel that is really good because there is a lot of detail. An example from earlier this year is The first pitch was a strike, then another, strike, and I found myself down 0-2 and the next pitch was right down the middle. I saw the laces spinning perfectly and I noticed it was a curve ball and I stepped and I watched the ball perfectly, and I swung It was a bomb down the left field line and I was so scared and I could only prey it went over the fence and I jumped and I went crazy. We won the championship and I was so happy my grandparents could see that. Screaming was all I heard. I was so happy. I feel that if this composition was given to us today I could put a lot more detail in that paragraph.