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~Erwaman~
It was a very unique experience for me to write this composition, mainly because I decided to write a romantic story. I have never written one so far, at least not one about one person and another person, so it was a little odd writing this. And I don't read many romance novels either. So it was up to my experience as a writer so far and from the few romantic pieces of writing I've read to try and write this composition. I wanted to try writing in this new style because I had never done so before and never had gotten such an opportunity to do so.
Overall, I was very pleased with my first attempt ever to write a romantic story. First of all, I believe my story has a well-planned setting and time slot. The story only lasts about 3 or 4 ours in the cafeteria, but that is why I was able to describe it in such detail to make for a more interesting story. I believe that I fit in the dialogue very well with the rest of the story. In some of my other works, the dialogue may seem a little out of place, but I believe that because the time slot was so short a period of time and the story was in such detail, that greatly helped the dialogue flow. I believe I did a good job with my introduction and setting the mood. My introduction describes me, where I am, the time, and what I am planning to do, which clears up any immediate questions the reader might have while reading the story, and therefore, allows me to proceed with the plot of the story.
I like how I start telling the story as if you were experiencing it as you went along. It all seems very logical and flowing. I believe that the way I entered in the characters, by having them arrive at different times, was very clever. This way, I didn't have to describe everything at once, and could use the arrival of a new character to help continue my story. I like how there is a kind of A-B-A-B-C format in my story. What I mean by this is that the structure of my story is written in a format like this where the "A" part would be the arrival of new characters, and the "B" part would be the action part where I tell what I'm doing and what's going on. I think that this transition back and forth between the "A" part and the "B" part is kind of like a movie where the screen keeps on alternating between the heroes and the villains until finally collide and end together in part "C."
I did catch a couple of careless grammatical and spelling errors while I was reading it through it, but I believe this was just because I was in a rush when I wrote the story, not having time to check it over. However, concerning the actual content and creativity of the writing, the main thing I think I could have improved upon was describing more about the romance part of the story. I believe for a story titled "My Senior Prom" where the reader may expect the story to be extremely romantic, it is quite off topic for most of the story. Most of the story doesn't even speak much of the dancing or the atmosphere, but is either conversation between some friends, or describing them playing games. I believe that I could have expanded on the romance part, which also could have served as something I could've went back and forth from between that and the friends playing games. Besides these few improvements, I believe this is a work of excellence that truly reflects my writing abilities.